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Time (31/01/2007 15:41)

I think i may currently be residing in the Department where bloggers go to be frustrated. Div 3 Dep 13 now contains myself, shy and webvictim - all three of us active bloggers. Is there a higher density of blogger to non blogger in any other division? I think not! We also have adib - who could blog more if he wished to!

Due to a very busy few weeks where i have

  1. been acting up at work into a management position and
  2. been offered a NEW job as a WRITER (of sorts - tis at least creative) for more cash and opportunities 

I have not this week got a proper entry for you. I feel it in my waters that my ongoing story may well continue at a more rapid pace from now on, but in the mean time here is a stop gap to be going on with.

The text below is a short story i didn't enter into competition. (I entered a different one.) 

The theme was "TIME" and it could be no more than 500 words. Here it is. Hope you like! As always, comments, thoughts etc appreciated muchly!

Au revoir my friends

It was six-thirty when Jack Miller, halfway through his second bacon-double-cheeseburger, was interrupted by the sudden appearance of Death in his front room. This was a surprise for Jack, partly because the sky had turned black and the clocks had stopped, but mostly because the figure of Death was not what he would have expected.

            Death, dusting himself down and peering around the room, was in fact a short, balding rotund man of middle age, wearing an ill fitting, crumpled grey suit.      

‘Can I help you?’ asked Jack timidly.

            ‘Jack Miller?’ asked Death, his eyes squinting at a small notepad.


            ‘I’m Death. I have come to take you to the afterlife,’ Death replied in a bored tone ‘if you wouldn’t mind coming with me…’

            ‘What? Why?’ spluttered Jack.

            ‘That’s what must be, Mr Miller. Look, I’m rather pushed for time’ he peered at Jack over the notepad and gestured to the spot beside him.

            ‘But I’m not dead!’ exclaimed Jack in horror. Death frowned. He closed his notepad and sat down next to Jack.

            ‘That is very true, Mr Miller,’ Death began, wriggling into a comfortable position. ‘But then, I’m working on something of a project that I thought you might be able to help me with.’

            Jack stared open mouthed into the round, frowning face of Death, into dull grey eyes, wrinkles of tiredness creasing away from the corners.

            ‘It’s like this,’ said Death, running his hand across his forehead. ‘I’m overworked, seriously so. Do you know how frequently you people die? It’s one every couple of seconds. Even with the ability to slow time to a crawl, it still moves on, I never get a break. It’s constant work.’ Jack looked confusedly at Death. 

            ‘Well, that’s not very nice, but I’m not sure I’m really the right person to help you out,’ said Jack

            ‘If I was asking you to do anything, that would be true, but in this circumstance, all I want from you is your time,’ replied Death.

            ‘My time?’


            ‘How much, exactly?’ asked Jack. He gestured to his burger ‘I mean, I’m pretty busy and…’

            ‘Twenty-five years, give or take,’ Jack’s mouth gaped again. ‘You see,’ continued Death, resting a hand on Jack’s shoulder, ‘You don’t do anything, you never have, you never will. If I can get a few more procrastinators like you ahead, a window opens up and I can have a holiday in twenty-five years time.’

            ‘You want me to die now, early, so you can have a holiday?’

            ‘Yes – what do you say?’


A few moments later, as the clocks started up and the sky brightened, Jack knew he had made the right choice. He now knew he had twenty-five years to change his life. He wouldn’t put things off anymore, no more laziness. Death had given him the gift of time, rather than the other way round, and he would make the most of it. Or he would in a bit. Maybe. Right after he finished his burger.


 (if you read this far, this may be of interest....

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Zz00009390 wrote:
16:43 31/01 2007
pictureAnyone think that Jack would change? I certainly don't. Very interesting story, certainly made me think...
Spinner wrote:
18:28 31/01 2007
pictureNice one!! Well written )

I hope and assume you have read the Discworld novels by Terry Pratchett, specially the ones where DEATH is a prominent character?
If not, let me know, and I'll recommend some books for you, maybe even send you a couple!   
Sir Johnny wrote:
18:55 31/01 2007
pictureWojteker, nice one! allways great fun to read what you write :)
Zz00000125 wrote:
19:54 31/01 2007

Wow. 500 word stories are brilliant. This reminds me of a lovely short story I read yesterday by Issac Asimov. I recommend you read it!

Lots of love,


Adib wrote:
02:12 01/02 2007

AWESOME Wojteker, just brilliant, lol... really :)

and yeah, all we need is a few more admins in our dept, that will be cool, hey, missSpoons, will you be in 3/13 soon? lol... yeah... bloggers, and admins... I have hard time with mozilla, that's why I don't post, I hate using Explorer hehe... tought competition in our dept... for playoffs that is haha

Aragorn II wrote:
06:21 01/02 2007
pictureVery good mate
Zz00030837 wrote:
11:10 01/02 2007
pictureIt seems that it will be the war of the bloggers in 3/13....

After my thunderous 2-1 victory against Wojteker yesterday - I feel anything is possible! (yes, OK, his player got a red card not far into the game, that might have had a small amount to do with it *coughs*)

It's going be an interesting season ;)

(Like Spinner, I also recommend the Discworld books, they're very good. Death is a funny guy)
Mr Chaos wrote:
11:57 01/02 2007
picturewow too ! great ideea ;)
Zz00044986 wrote:
19:57 01/02 2007
picturewow ! great idea
Adib wrote:
00:07 02/02 2007
pictureHaha Webvictim... you beat Wojteker, and he beat the div2 team (Fystor) and you will be playing him soon? you better not loose 7-0 haha... well, yeah, war of the bloggers :)
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